Musings of an Aspiring Author and Poet

I Beg Of Heaven – A Villanelle

May 2, 2013

Poetry

I beg of heaven for light of day

For night fills dreams of you with fear

On bended knee in tears I pray

What can I do, what dare I say

To break this darkness with love and cheer

I beg of heaven for light of day

This deep despair I keep at bay

In hopes you’ll return my cherished dear

On bended knee in tears I pray

I never would your heart betray

My passion felt I have made so clear

I beg of heaven for light of day

Were I to change would then you stay

Anything I’d do to mend heartbreak severe

On bended knee in tears I pray

To you, I promise to never stray

Your honor I’ll guard and never besmear

I beg of heaven for light of day

On bended knee in tears I pray

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~~ Dominic R. DiFrancesco ~~

** I thought I would give a new style a try. The Villanelle is in the form of A1 B A2 / a b A1 / a b A2 / a b A1 / a b A2 / a b A1 A2. It is very structured, but was interesting to write. I would appreciate any feedback you may wish to provide. Thanks.

Comments

14 responses to “I Beg Of Heaven – A Villanelle”

kimberlyharding

May 2, 2013

Beautiful and lovely use of the form!

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1. Dom DiFrancesco
  
  May 2, 2013
  
  Thank you very much, this was a first for me. :)
  
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Rhonda L. Brockmeyer

May 2, 2013

I smokin’ loved this. Love villanelle. So perfect. Nice work here Dom.

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1. Dom DiFrancesco
  
  May 2, 2013
  
  Thank you Rhonda, I was bored and decided to look at other forms that I had never tried and this one looked interesting. I’m so glad that you liked it. This encourages me to try it again. :)
  
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cozyblanketsnowflakerepetitioncompulsion

May 2, 2013

This is delicious poetry! I have to admit that the Villanelle is most likely my favourite form of poetry, though I haven’t written one in a couple years!!

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1. Dom DiFrancesco
  
  May 2, 2013
  
  Thank you very much for that, this was my first attempt at it, but will likely try some more until they become natural for me. I really like them as well.
  
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Lucid Gypsy

May 2, 2013

As someone far to lazy to learn about poetry’s structure I can only read in awe and enjoy.

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1. Dom DiFrancesco
  
  May 2, 2013
  
  Thank you very much, that is so nice of you to say. I don’t find your work lazy at all, I rather enjoy it. Keep doing what you are doing. :)
  
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Author Of My Own Misfortune

May 2, 2013

I absolutely love the villanelle! sometimes I find that when there’s something I really want to write about but the words won’t come, the form and structure of the villanelle make it easier to get it out :)

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1. Dom DiFrancesco
  
  May 2, 2013
  
  Thank you, it is still not a comfortable form for me, but I do love it and I’m sure the more I write them the easier it will get. :)
  
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lvsrao

May 3, 2013

Very nice poem.

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1. Dom DiFrancesco
  
  May 3, 2013
  
  Thank you very much, I appreciate you taking the time to read it.
  
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words4jp

May 3, 2013

this is beautiful. sometimes it is hard to stretch ourselves or step out of the box – you are a wonderful writer – I am certain that any form you delve into will be a successful venture! What’s next?

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1. Dom DiFrancesco
  
  May 3, 2013
  
  Thank you, that is really nice of you to say. I just thought I would try something I hadn’t done before and I liked it and will be doing more of these in the future. :)
  
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