Dom DiFrancesco

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Staring Blindly Into The Great Beyond (Sonnet)

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Staring blindly into the great beyond

Feet broken and blistered at life’s crossroad

Scarcely knowing how to respond

From bearing these trials, a heavy load

This burden great, when might it end

Providing the bounty the Lord inspired

My back is weary with painful bend

Longing for rest, I’m oh so tired

Fate has dealt a sour hand

One which beats this soul far down

A wish to stand on solid land

Is swallowed up and surely drowned

In the end where doth fault lie

Somewhere unknown when this body dies

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~~ Dominic R. DiFrancesco ~~

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3 responses to “Staring Blindly Into The Great Beyond (Sonnet)”

  1. Holistic Wayfarer Avatar
    Holistic Wayfarer

    I like the weary with painful bend.

    Something to think about?
    you have weary, then the longing for rest followed by the so tired.

    Seems a double repetition.

    http://aholisticjourney.wordpress.com/2013/05/25/the-writing-process-save-spit-part-2/

    If you are not pleased with the input, please feel free to delete the comment. I would not have spent the time if I didn’t care to be helpful.

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    1. Dom DiFrancesco Avatar
      Dom DiFrancesco

      All input is welcome. The writing of sonnets is new to me and I can see where it may have been viewed as repetitive. It is something for me to watch for in the future. I do appreciate the comment. :)

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      1. Holistic Wayfarer Avatar
        Holistic Wayfarer

        Niiice. I’m glad, Dom. =)

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