I beg of heaven for light of day
For night fills dreams of you with fear
On bended knee in tears I pray
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What can I do, what dare I say
To break this darkness with love and cheer
I beg of heaven for light of day
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This deep despair I keep at bay
In hopes you’ll return my cherished dear
On bended knee in tears I pray
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I never would your heart betray
My passion felt I have made so clear
I beg of heaven for light of day
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Were I to change would then you stay
Anything I’d do to mend heartbreak severe
On bended knee in tears I pray
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To you, I promise to never stray
Your honor I’ll guard and never besmear
I beg of heaven for light of day
On bended knee in tears I pray
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~~ Dominic R. DiFrancesco ~~
** I thought I would give a new style a try. The Villanelle is in the form of A1 B A2 / a b A1 / a b A2 / a b A1 / a b A2 / a b A1 A2. It is very structured, but was interesting to write. I would appreciate any feedback you may wish to provide. Thanks.
Beautiful and lovely use of the form!
Thank you very much, this was a first for me. :)
I smokin’ loved this. Love villanelle. So perfect. Nice work here Dom.
Thank you Rhonda, I was bored and decided to look at other forms that I had never tried and this one looked interesting. I’m so glad that you liked it. This encourages me to try it again. :)
This is delicious poetry! I have to admit that the Villanelle is most likely my favourite form of poetry, though I haven’t written one in a couple years!!
Thank you very much for that, this was my first attempt at it, but will likely try some more until they become natural for me. I really like them as well.
As someone far to lazy to learn about poetry’s structure I can only read in awe and enjoy.
Thank you very much, that is so nice of you to say. I don’t find your work lazy at all, I rather enjoy it. Keep doing what you are doing. :)
I absolutely love the villanelle! sometimes I find that when there’s something I really want to write about but the words won’t come, the form and structure of the villanelle make it easier to get it out :)
Thank you, it is still not a comfortable form for me, but I do love it and I’m sure the more I write them the easier it will get. :)
Very nice poem.
Thank you very much, I appreciate you taking the time to read it.
this is beautiful. sometimes it is hard to stretch ourselves or step out of the box – you are a wonderful writer – I am certain that any form you delve into will be a successful venture! What’s next?
Thank you, that is really nice of you to say. I just thought I would try something I hadn’t done before and I liked it and will be doing more of these in the future. :)