Blackened hearts draw blood
Cross and careless with their words
Hate grows like a weed
How does passion turn so cold
Killing off those we once loved
~~ Dominic R. DiFrancesco ~~
Blackened Heart Draws Blood (Tanka)
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14 responses to “Blackened Heart Draws Blood (Tanka)”
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Love this. Yes dark, but so poignant.
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Thank you Kim…one of my dark moods. :)
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xx
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How does that happen? Very good Tanka! i admire your work!
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Thank you. I really don’t know how it happens. How does one go from loving someone to absolutely hating them…this is beyond me (barring abuse of any kind or cheating I suppose).
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Don’t be careless about what you say, you never know who’s listening.
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Very true, words can definitely hurt. :(
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I´m throwing a barrage of LIKE´s here, but I just like them. As a very novice poet myself, well if you can consider poetry what I write, could you tell me if you have time what is the difference between the Tanka and Haiku, I did gather that Haiku was 5-7-5 syllables for each of the three lines although I don´t see anybody using that metric.
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Hi Charly – You are right, the haiku does use 5-7-5 syllables for three lines. I never write a haiku that doesn’t follow this rule. The tanka uses 5-7-5-7-7 syllables for 5 lines and again, I never stray from this. One other twist to the haiku is that it typically deals with nature and the seasons in some form while a senryu follows the same 5-7-5 form, but typically deals with human nature and emotions. Many poets don’t make this differentiation, me included very often unless I am writing for a prompt that specifically requests a senryu. Anyway, both forms, haiku and tanka are terrific and not as easy to write as one might expect. I hope this helps. – Dom
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Hi there Dom, it sure helps I actually wrote it down, not kidding. I did try to do 3 haiku´s and submit them to one of the wordpress people who had a little challenge going on, the first time I wrote a Haiku following the 5-7-5 rule and I actually think I spend about 45 minutes to write 3 that would read nice and follow the rules. Didn´t get into the nature thing, but is good to know and that´s probably why the guy told me that thank you but sorry. I actually got hooked doing those little poems, I thought it would be boring but I found out with my face stuck into my notebook fidgeting around with words and loved it. Thank´s for the response
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My pleasure, try to have fun doing them and remember short doesn’t mean easy, but anything worth doing should provide a little bit of a challenge.
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You´re certainly right, and I liked the challenge of it plus I had fun.
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Good to hear my friend, that is what it is all about.
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Tanka does seem longer :)
Dom DiFrancesco 
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